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**Revised Script:** **Page 1** **Panel 1** * Exterior of the hospital at night. A dark figure with glowing red eyes is perched on a tree branch, overlooking the hospital. **Caption** Outside the hospital, a sinister presence lurks... **Page 2** **Panel 1** * Back in David's ward, Nathan Criss is speaking to David and Terry. **Nathan Criss** ...and I'm telling you, werewolves and supernatural creatures exist in the real world! **David** (looking shocked) What?! That's impossible! **Terry** (equally stunned) How can that be true? **Page 3** **Panel 1** * Nathan continues to speak, unaware of the danger behind him. **Nathan Criss** We don't have much time, guys- **Page 3** **Panel 2** * The dark figure from the tree, Kael Kellan, is now standing behind Nathan. David and Terry see him and try to warn Nathan. **David** (alarmed) Nathan, behind you! **Terry** (surprised) Oh no! **Page 4** **Panel 1** * Kael Kellan grabs Nathan by the neck with one hand and steps out of the shadows, revealing his appearance. **Kael Kellan** (to David) You. I've been looking for you, David. You see, I'm the one who bit you... and I want you to join my pack. **Caption** Kael Kellan: Pale skin, brown curly hair, brown beard, hooded eyes, red glowing iris, convex nose, deep bite teeth with fangs, wearing a black trench coat, black jeans, and white top with Adidas Superstar shoes. **Page 5** **Panel 1** * A woman with sleek red hair, monolid eyes, and a curvy body rushes into the room. **Woman** Kael, let him go! **Page 5** **Panel 2** * Kael Kellan drops Nathan and jumps out of the window, disappearing into the night. **Kael Kellan** (to David) I'll be back for you soon, David... **Caption** Kael Kellan jumps through the window, leaving David, Nathan, and the mysterious woman behind. **Page 6** **Panel 1** * The woman and Nathan rush to the window, looking out into the night. **Nathan** (looking out the window) He's gone... **Woman** (concerned) We need to get you out of here, David. Now. Corrected issues: * Format and structure: The script now follows a standard comic book script format, with clear panel descriptions, character dialogue, and captions. * Pacing: The revised script breaks up the action and dialogue into manageable chunks, allowing for better pacing and visual storytelling. * Character descriptions: Character descriptions are now presented in a clear and concise manner, making it easier for the artist to visualize the characters. * Dialogue: Dialogue is now more concise and natural-sounding, with a focus on character interaction and development. * Visual storytelling: The revised script focuses on creating a clear visual narrative, with descriptions of setting, action, and characters that will help the artist bring the story to life. Note: Some creative liberties were taken to enhance the script's clarity and flow, while maintaining the original tone and intent.